Friday, April 30, 2010

Whoop! Whoop! Friday Update!!

















Awh...aren't those penguins just the cutest thing in the world? They make me smile ;-)

Okay peeps, time to get serious!
Hahahaha...yeah, right!
It's Friday y'all!
You know what that means, right?

YUP!

F R I D A Y U P D A T E !!!

Now, where shall I begin? I'm afraid that this Friday isn't near as interesting as previous Friday's. I've been up to my eyeballs in work and have got like zero done. It pains me to say it, yes. I've slacked this week. Heck, I needed sometime to sleep, didn't I?

First, lets give a big WHOOP! WHOOP! to the 103 followers!!!! Lucky number 100 was Sebastian at From My Hip Pocket

Thanks to everyone who finds my blog entertaining enough to follow. Hopefully I don't bore you to death all the time. If I do, there's a club behind your monitor...feel free to give me a whack and tell me get with it. Now that we've reached that milestone, it's CONTEST time! I'm still mulling over what type of contest. I have three ideas. Let me know if you prefer one or the other in your comments. Notice they don't have anything to do with entries and numbers. I. Hate. Math. LoL. Here they are: (and thanks to those who offered up these ideas)

*Worst/most ridiculous short fiction story (400K or less)
*Worst one-liner pitch for book
*And, for some reason #3 has slipped my mind. Oh well, tell me what you think about the other two. Or offer up your own suggestions! If we go with one of these, I will pick a batch of finalists and you followers can pick the winner!!!!!!!!! It will be fun and entertaining because we spend so much time writing the best, lets spend some time writing the worst. YAY!

1. My beta, aka Sarah, has had her partial with an agent for 21 days. GO GIRL! Also, she's going to some spiffy conference type thing this weekend and gets to have part of her ms critiqued by an agent. In person. Yikes! I'm nervous for her - so let's wish her luck.
G O O D * L U C K * S A R A H ! ! ! ! !
Her writing is awesome, so I'm not really worried, but we all now how I feel about pitching.

2. BTTB is alllllmmmmoooosssstttt done. I'm not crossing my fingers this time. 30 pages left in another rewrite that beta demanded. That's okay though, it needed it. And, I honestly think I would jump off a bridge if Sarah told me too. :o)

3. No progress on AAG or daughters YA.

4. I have decided to query RD (the short romance) I just haven't had time to do it yet. Not only that...can you believe I actually don't have a query letter for this baby? The two times it's been queried, it didn't require a "query" - only the synopsis. So now I have to write a query....grrrrrr. Maybe I'll hold off on it. LoL.

5. Check it out - I totally got the dogs to hold still long enough to take pictures in their snuggies. It will be the next learning about Justine post. You totally have to see the before and after pics. They are so funny. Puff looks like a different dog each spring! It's weird! And laughable.

6. I think we need some more guest bloggers. Don't you? Anyone up for volunteering?!? I love listening to what other writers have to say and I LOVE to share it even more!

Well...yeah, that's just about it for this week.

ANNOUNCEMENT (sadly)

I will be taking next week off the blog. It's closing time for my University and by the time I get home at night, my brain will be all tired out. Which means I also won't be perusing your blogs either. I'm officially checking out for a one week hiatus. *Super sad face* Don't worry though, I'll be back on May 10th a renewed Justine! And the official 100 follower contest will be announced then too!!

Until then peeps!

~JD

Thursday, April 29, 2010

Happy Thursday!



That's right, folks. Today will be a H A P P Y B R E A K for me. The weeks been crazy, as I'm sure you can tell from my lack of visits to your blogs. I'm soooo sorry!!! I promise I will be back at it after May 10th! PROMISE!!!

Y I P P I E ---------------->
C H E C K ----------------------->
I T ------------------------------------>
O U T------------------------------------------->

It's the lucky number!! 102

Actually, the lucky number was 100, but I'll take 102 too.
*Super Cheesy Smile*

THANK YOU EVERYONE!!! As soon as I get my head out of my work, I will follow all of you and become an obsessed stalker of your blog. This is my official Justine oath. ;-)

Since we've broken the 100 mark, it's CONTEST time!! Whoo Hoo!! Just let me figure out what kind of contest and we'll get this ball rolling!

Now, since I'm taking a happy break today, I'm not going to say anything inspiring or thought provoking. I am, however, leaving you with a puzzle. Your brain told me it needed some food. Plus, every once in a while you need to have some fun. Here you go:

I think it's called a rebus puzzle. Each box contains words organized in some fancy fashion that make one word/phrase. So, this is your job today peeps. Figure out the puzzle.

Ready?
Set...
GO!




Tune in tomorrow, where I will have something important to talk about. Maybe...lol. It will be Friday update time! Yeehaw!

And just in case you are wondering, I do not have the answers for the rebus puzzle. Heehee.

~JD

Tuesday, April 27, 2010

Poetry Author: Dave Malone

I've got a friend, Dave Malone, who writes romantic poetry. I've read two of his books, and quite frankly - they are awesome. Dave really has special talent when it comes to putting emotions down in short poems. They are moving and thought-provoking. They are, in a nutshell: AMAZING. I love his work. And so will you.

Here are the two books I read and loved:




Poems to Love and the Body is um...pretty much what it says. Actually, out of the two, it's my favorite. It's a journey. The book is a like the journey of finding love. The beginning poems are what I would call darker, more sad. And as you go through the book they get lighter, stronger, and take us to that thing we all try to find: love. My favorite poems are in the very back of the book.
Dave has allowed me to share a poem from the book, so I will share one of my favorites:

Quivering

It has been so long since my skin
has been touched like that.
Slow, thoughtful, full of meaning,
like some epic poem,
some sonnet of Shakespeare,
some art piece destined to make us feel
so alive in our humanness.

And I quiver, and my face
contorts like those ugly theater masks,
and your eyes grow wide like a sea,
and you say to me something
about my vulnerable look.
And I first think about hiding behind
a smoke screen from a cigarette,
or I think then to tell you some frilly words
like a university poet dodging behind
a smoke screen of poetic language.

But I find that I can't hide,
that I have a hollow in my stomache,
and I whisper to you something simple.
A red plum on a white disk.
A lock of hair against a pillow.
A kiss brushing a cheek.
It's been so long since
I've allowed myself so much.

My FAV poem from this book is So Close There is Nothing Left between Us, but it is too long to post here. I would highly suggest reading it. Well, you need to buy the book first, but it's worth it. ;-)

Under the Sycamore is, again, excellent. It's a series of short poems inspired by poetry from women of the ninth century court in imperial Japan. Funny thing, I read this book all the way through, and even though this one is filled with individual poems, if you read straight through it's almost like a story in itself. Moving. Passionate. Amazing. Nuff' said.

If you like romance, at all, or if you like poetry, you shouldn't go another day without reading Dave's work.

You can purchase them from his website or directly from Amazon

No matter what you do, check out his website. There's also a link from his website to his blog. He's pretty awesome, and his writing is not too shabby either :o)

Also...remember the contest I mentioned? The one I will have when I reach 100 followers? YAY! Well, both of Dave's books are in the prize pool. *Super Smile*

~JD

Monday, April 26, 2010

Grammar Police! The Superlative




















I know what you all are thinking:
The superlative...hmm....huh?
The what?
What the heck is the sheriff talking about now?
Gather round' folks, it's time you learn about something my beta taught me:

THE SUPERLATIVE

Definition (adjective):

1.of the highest kind, quality, or order; surpassing all else or others; supreme; extreme: superlative wisdom.
2.Grammar. of, pertaining to, or noting the highest degree of the comparison of adjectives and adverbs, as smallest, best, and most carefully, the superlative forms of small, good, and carefully.Compare comparative (def. 4), positive (def. 20).
3.being more than is proper or normal; exaggerated in language or style.

So, what is a superlative exactly?
And what the heck does it have to do with my writing?!?
Well, a superlative is one of those things you might find in your ms that like might look like these:

It was the greatest fear I've ever known.
It hurt more than anything she'd ever felt.
Never in her life had she been subject to such disappointment.
It was a love stronger than anything.

It is the extreme inner feeling, emotion, thought, etc. It is the greatest, highest, furthest, strongest emotion/thought/feeling you can have. You can't get anything bigger than a superlative phrase. It is the omega when dealing with emotions.

Now, I know what you're thinking again....what does this have to do with my ms, Justine?

Well, do you have any of these in your ms? Did your MC ever think or say, "Oh my god, this is the freakiest thing I have ever seen."

Or, "The searing pain my chest was the greatest pain I've known."

And my personal favorite (given to me by my Beta while she was pointing out a superlative in my ms) "The is the greatest superlative I have ever seen!" She gave me a superlative while pointing out a superlative. She's funny like that. ;-)

Okay, so I could totally go on and on with the examples, but I'm hoping you get the drift.

One, and I want to make this clear: a superlative isn't really a grammar thing. It's really more of a stylistic thing (as my beta pointed out). It's not "wrong" really...but think about this: if you use this type of phrasing a lot in your ms, what does the reader have look forward too?

A Superlative can be important in your ms. So long as you use the sparingly. Notice the emphasis on sparingly. Basically if you are constantly equating your feelings to the greatest feeling of something, the punch looses its umph after the first few times. Use it once, maybe twice - but no more. And, I've personally noticed that they are best when used at/near the end.

My beta *bow* pointed this out to me. And my ms was sprinkled like ice cream with this crap. After she pointed it out I was like "word vomit"! That's what it looks like to me now anyway. The overdose of emotions. The extreme explanation. Basically....over exaggerated.

It's an absolute of something.

The highest, strongest, biggest, best of something. Since your the writer, you describe what that 'something' is. I would just recommend that you don't use it too often. According to Wikipedia, grammarians don't really like superlatives. Do you remember what I told you about them being mean? We don't want a scary grammarians haunting your dreams. They bite.

So, now you know what a superlative is. Do with this information what you will. I've seen stories with zero superlatives and I've seen stories with MUNDO superlatives (heehee...mine - and others too). I'm not saying don't use them. I'm just saying, use them only when you must. You don't want your big scenes or phrases to loose umph, do you? I didn't think so.


Dismissed!

~JD

Friday, April 23, 2010

Whoop! Whoop! Friday Update!


Whoa! Chill out Garfield! Yes, it's Friday!
Can you believe it's that time again? Friday update peeps! Friday update!

Here goes:

It was a pretty decent week, right? We had the guest blog from MaybeGenuis, aka Steph. You're learning more everyday with the Grammar Police, aren't you?? You know you are!! ;-) And you know learning about me is the highlight of your day. Well, at least pretend for me, k? Thanks!

And....guess what?!?!? When I get to 100 followers, I'm going to have a contest! To bad I don't know what kind yet. Suggestions peeps...I need suggestions!! I do know what some of the prizes will be!! I'm keeping that a secret though. Nothing too big...but I think they are cool ;-)

Hey, you know what? Every time I look up at Garfield's picture, I totally laugh. He looks crazy!

First up I wanted to say thank you to all my followers (new and old). I'm up to 90! WELCOME!!!! You guys are the greatest! If I haven't followed you in return, drop me a line and I will ;-) Also, I've been a little behind on checking out everyone's blog this week. Work (and life in general) has been CRAZY. As soon as stuff chills out a little (like the second week in May) I'll be waaaay more involved.

So let's talk writing updates, shall we?

1. I think I'm going to start querying my 46K romance again. Not very many places to do so, but I thought I might as well give it a shot. I've actually only queried it twice, so one rejection and one request for a full with a rejection ain't too shabby.

2. The edit on BTTB is almost done. Well, it was almost done. Even though I kissed my beta's feet, she pointed a few new errors near the end. Man, I hate this. I love her, but I hate this. It's a romantic suspense and I vow right now to never write another one. Just plain romance from now on. All the suspense pieces are driving me nutty! I wanted to have the rewrite and edit done by the end of April. That goal is totally out the window, so lets strive for the middle of May....maybe? Hopefully? More kissing on the beta's feet probably?

3. My current wip AAG is begging in the corner to be finished. I managed to squeeze another chapter out of it this week (that's about 2,500 words btw). Out of every story I have written, this one is my fav. And since it's halfway done, I'm totally psyched to finish it!

4. Daughters story is still frozen in time and will remain that way until I finish #2.

5. Guess what?!?!? My dogs got their summer haircuts this week!!! Well, two of them did. Then mother nature decided to get all cold again so I had to buy them doggie snuggies so they would stop shivering. Poor little things. But can you believe they actually make doggie snuggies? They are cute. Here's what they look like:


Now, I'm not the type of person who just likes to dress their dogs up for the fun of it. They needed the snuggies to keep warm...they were shivering like crazy! They hate them, but it stops the shivers. I'll post some pictures of the dogs in their snuggies if I can get the boogers to hold still long enough.

6. Okay, you all know how much a brag on my beta, right? I couldn't live without Sarah. I mentioned she got a partial request recently, so I'm going to start doing a count-down for her. Her book is A W E S O M E so I'm sure it will find a good home with the perfect agent in the near future. So, her partial has officially been with the agent for 14 days. They could have it for up to twelve weeks. CHEER HER ON!!!!!!!


Hmmmm....I think that's it. Wow...I'm losing my edge. I need more stuff to talk about :o)

~JD

Thursday, April 22, 2010

Does your genre make it harder to snag an agent?


I've been wondering recently if some genre's are harder to break into than others. I realize that trends come and go, and during the height of a trend, it would be more difficult to find an agent unless you story is stellar. Think the Twilight craze.

But, aside from trends, are there any genre's that are generally harder to break into right out of the gate?

I've heard literary fiction is difficult. Personally, I don't even know what it is. I'm sad, I know.

Maybe YA is hard because young readers are ever changing?

Steampunk? Okay, I don't know what that is either. Google Time!!!!

Fantasy? I can see this one being difficult too because is can be so broad - the possibilities are endless.

My genre is romance and yes, it's difficult to break into (because let's face it...all are hard in the general getting published aspect). But I don't think it's harder than others (like literary fiction).
The romance market is HUGE and accounted for $1.37 billion dollars in sales last year alone. The age range? 18-108. Our genre never outgrows our readers and women always want that lovey-dovey story that makes them feel all warm and fuzzy inside. Romance will not die. If anything, it will grow. So, I'm lucky in that regard I guess. I have a genre that has a strong market presence. But the other genres? I'm not so sure.
So first, what's your genre? Second, do you think yours is hard to break into? If so, what makes it that way?

~JD

Tuesday, April 20, 2010

Guest Blogger: YA Romance



Everyone welcome Steph from Maybe Genius as this weeks guest blogger! She's put together a wonderful post about YA Romance. So, without further ado, away we go!
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I’ll admit this right up front: I’m not a big fan of the romance genre. It doesn’t woo me the way it woos so many others. However, that doesn’t mean I don’t love relationship building, will-they-or-won’t-they tension, and lots and lots of kissing. I just don’t enjoy it as the central hub around which a novel turns.

Although it’s not my preference, I do have one rather large Achilles’ Heel when it comes to the lovey-doveys: I adore it in YA. Young adult romance can be wonderful to read. If the characters spark with just the right chemistry, it can make for some of the most passionate and refreshing kissy-and-love scenes out there.

What is it about YA romance that ignites me so much more than adult?

- Viewing the world through the teenage lens is invigorating. Teens are constantly experiencing firsts. First kiss, first time falling in love, first relationship, first time having sex, first heartbreak. Every first is an adventure; one that is felt in its rawest, most elemental form. The emotion, upheaval, passion and lust are dizzying.

- Teenage romance runs the full gamut of experience. You can find anything from a chaste, sugar-sweet love story to a bubbling-over, sexy romp. Slow-boil sexual tension (my favorite) is standard fare in this genre.

- It’s not all about the sex scene. Young adult authors are mindful with the nookie. They have to be – go into too much detail and your teen novel is bumped up to adult. Because of this, YA sex scenes are usually treated with a great deal of tact. They’re sexy by leaving more up to the imagination.

- It’s about the experience. Love, loss, life, and growing up. The butterflies, the heart-pounding-at-the-top-of-your-throat feeling, the electric spark of the first touch, the absolute gutted, physically painful feeling of heartbreak. I love reliving that, and it inspires me to try and recapture it in my adult love life. Well, not the heartbreak part.

- There are so many stories where the romance isn’t the focal point, but a subplot meant to add character depth. I am an adventure/journey person, and much of YA literature includes a journey – toward adulthood, toward saving the world, whatever. Plus bonus kissy time!

I’m certain that romance writers will say many of these elements can be found in adult romance as well, and they’re right. But there’s a certain magic about adolescence that we can’t quite capture once we’re experienced adults. We have our biases and skepticism firmly in place, and we’ve had these experiences already. Even when they’re with a new person, they’re not really new to us anymore.

So, what’s hot in YA romance? Anything. Teens will eat it up. However, the publishing industry has been growing extremely weary of paranormal romance featuring vampires, werewolves, angels, demons, and other immortals, and teens have also been displaying their boredom with works similar to Hush, Hush/Twilight/Shiver/etc..

If you’re currently working on or querying a YA paranormal romance, be aware that you are up against very stiff competition. Your novel needs to display serious originality to break through the barriers currently in place, whether it’s in plot or voice. Don’t stop writing it! Just understand that the market is hypersensitive to it right now. If you’re interested in works that ARE being picked up, dystopian, urban fantasy and contemporary romances seem to be doing very well.

As always, I fully recommend that everyone check out the young adult section of the bookstore. There’s something for everyone, and it will be wicked cool on so many levels you’ll wonder why you didn’t take a peek before!

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Thank you Steph for the wonderful post. Check out her blog here. She's always got lots of fun stuff to talk about! Also, she's in the process of moving to sunny California, so we wish her luck in her move!

~JD

Monday, April 19, 2010

Grammar Police! Comma Splice


So, I've started taking requests for the Grammar Police. Hit me with your best shot. I dare ya'. ;-)

Last week someone asked for some comma advice. Now, comma information needs to be dealt with in NUMEROUS posts. There's just way to much to discuss in just one. So, first up - the comma splice. First and foremost I have to say that I had to ask my beta for advice on this topic. She's awesome, and I knew I couldn't explain near as well as her. She will be helping with the other commas posts as well (so long as I ask her nicely). Say thank you, everyone. ;-) Okay, fasten your seat belts - here we go:

A comma splice is where you use a comma to put together two independent phrases (sometimes known as a run-on sentence...lol) Here's an example:

Johnny walked his dog down the street, the dog took a poop on the maple tree.

Comma splices are CONDEMNED!!! Do not do it!!! It's two independent sentences. You must do something to fix it.

Now, I must point out that a comma splice is considered a run-on sentence, but is not the only example of a run-on sentence. In fact, some grammarians actually exclude comma splices from the definition of a run-on sentence. Grammarians...that's a funny word, isn't it? I didn't come up with it - my beta did. I think I may have to google that one. :o)

Now, the easiest way to fix a comma splice is to simply make the two parts two separate sentences. Like this:

Johnny walked his dog down the street. The dog took a poop on the maple tree.

Or, if you want to keep phrases in the same sentence, you need to separate them with a semi-colon. Like this:

Johnny walked his dog down the street; the dog took a poop on the maple tree.

There is yet one more way to fix a comma splice. You can use a coordinating conjunction (so, but, and are the most common) after the comma to connect the two independent phrases. Like this:

Johnny walked the dog down the street, so the dog took a poop on the maple tree.

So, the three remedies for comma splice:

1. use a period to make 2 separate sentences.

2. use a semicolon if the two sentences are somehow closely related and need to be more closely linked

3. use a coordinating conjunction just after the comma and prior to continuing with the independent phrase. (so, but, and, etc.)

Confusing? Yeah...I think so too. So, to clear things up, I just say PUT IN A PERIOD! Or a semicolon if that's your thing. Or the conjunction if that's your thing. Up to you. But don't you dare use the comma splice or the grammarian will haunt your dreams. And she's mean.

If you want to learn more - go to these websites. They might be able to explain it way better than me:

http://www.punctilious.org/grammar/runons.htm

My favorite (the Purdue OWL...they make it so easy to understand this stuff) http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/598/02/

So then, when do you use and actual comma? Well, I'm glad you asked. I'll save that for another day ;-)

And is anyone wondering why I had the dog poop "on" the maple tree instead of "next" to it? Comic relief peeps. Comic relief. ;-)

OH! And don't forget...we've got a guest blogger tomorrow. Steph from MaybeGenius is doing a post for us about YA Romance. Don't forget to check back in!

~JD

Friday, April 16, 2010

Whoop! Whoop! Friday Update!!


So, IT'S FRIDAY!!!You know you've been dying to know what's up with me this week, right?

Nice pic, huh? Well, someone once told me that if I were one of the seven dwarfs, I would be Grumpy. I laughed. It fits. Most of the time, anyway. ;-) Well, it fits this week. I remember I said last week was bad, but I changed my mind - this week was worse.

1. The publisher has had my full ms submission for...well - no more days now. I received the rejection to the full ms on Monday afternoon. Sure did make what I thought was going to be a good week turn into a bad week. Blah... Well, I guess I can look at the bright side, I can start querying this again. Only problem: it's only 46k (a short contemporary romance) which has VERY few places to find a home. Two have already been marked off the list, which leaves hmmm....one more...or was it two? Crap, see? This is what I get for writing a short story. I may have to tuck this puppy in a drawer and wait to see if I ever get anything else published first. Then maybe this short sucker would have a chance.

2. BBTB - editing in process. I screwed up the rewrite, beta had to crack the whip. Ouch! It's okay, though, I'll sludge through somehow. I want to query dagnabbit! Thanks to Bransforums...and my beta...and Ghost, I have the best query this side of the Mason-Dixon (Okay, maybe that's a bit much.) It is good though.

3. AAG - current wip. Word count added: 2,679. Don't ask how that happened. I must have done it in my sleep. I haven't re-read what I wrote, I may end up hating it.

4. Daughters story - frozen in time.

5. Holy Smoly!!! I'm up to 75 followers. WOW!! THANK YOU!!! I think when I get to one hundred I'll have some kind of a contest. I don't know what kind, but it's be something cool. Cuz that's just the way I roll. ;-) Any suggestions?

6. Here's an interesting thing to keep in mind that I learned this week: don't eat pizza and then try and do your nightly run. Ummm....it causes a little upset stomach and some...well...I won't go into detail. Just don't do it. It's bad.

7. Guess what I discovered this week? Google Reader! I didn't realize Blogger had such a cool function! I'm totally going to use it now. I've been having a hard time keeping up with the all the blogs recently (sorry I've been a little absent from commenting - but trust me, I do READ THEM ALL EVERY DAY)

GUEST BLOGGER FOR NEXT WEEK!!!!! YAY!!!!
Steph will be joining us next week for a snippet about YA Romance. Don't forget to drop by then!
So, I guess that's it. Instead of Grumpy I'm feeling more like Sleepy, so I think I'll check out for the weekend. Later Taters!

~JD

Thursday, April 15, 2010

Pitching at a conference/to an agent


Do you go to writing conferences? If so, do you pitch to an agent/editor while you are there?

I'm a member of the RWA (Romance Writers of America). They have a huge conference every year at different places across the US. This year, it's actually pretty darn close to where I live. Just one state south. I could be there in less than four hours. It is the closest they will be to me during the next five years.

It's HUGE, I tell ya. The perfect place to meet agents, editors and really rub elbows with the right people. Because I'm a RWA Pro member, I get second dibs on agent appointments (First dibs go to Golden Heart winners/runners up - that's RWA's version of an unpublished novelist Oscar. I have not won one...yet). Not too shabby, right? A few agent appointments and I could be on my way from "writer" to "author" (yes, there is a difference, one is published, one is not)

But, I'm not going. I will probably never attend their conference because:

1. It's too expensive (Over $400 to register for the event alone, not including the over $100 per night hotel room. Ouch!).
2. Believe it or not - I'm really shy in person. I don't even know if really shy covers it. Uber shy? Overly shy? Incredibly shy? Outrageously shy? Anything extreme...that's how shy I am.

There are other writing conferences and stuff around where I live during the year. Other places I could go and pitch to an agent. But, I probably won't attend other conferences either. If your wondering why, please refer to #1 and #2 again.

First let's consider that I am the tightest person you will ever meet. Heck, when you've got a daughter who is obsessed with horses and you're responsible for taking care of one/two (including all the random stuff that comes with it), you learn pretty darn fast to be frugal with your money. I'm the queen of frugality.

Second, S H Y. Nuff' said. Seriously though. If I had more balls, I would pitch to some stranger. But, like I said, I'm shy. Not to mention the terrible fear of rejection. In person would only make me worse. I would clam up at first, not be able to put a coherent sentence together to even pitch the story. Once I did start start talking I would no doubt sound like a blubbering idiot. The agents would laugh at me and I would probably run out crying. Yes, I can be emotional. Go ahead and giggle at my expense - I don't mind.

I realize I have handicapped myself in this regard because I'm missing out on some pretty good opportunities. But that's okay. I am determined, which means I will find other avenues. Persevere in some other way...because pitching - that's just ain't for me ;-)

What about you?

~JD

Wednesday, April 14, 2010

Impromtu Post: Check out this Contest

So, I don't normally do impromptu posts, mine are normally pre-scheduled - BUT, since most of you are writers, like me - you NEED to check out this contest: This writer is celebrating the publication of her first book and she having an awesome contest with FANTASTIC prizes! Seriously, you could win LUNCH WITH JANET REID. Susan Townsend could critique the first 30 pages of your MS!!!

http://sarahwithachance.blogspot.com/2010/04/something-fun-and-celebratory.html?showComment=1271253536328_AIe9_BF8DSSHU-i5_-I-f0pmMxoULv-iGR5ks_TovQrovMG-BcCoouQbTwpfF8_loS1UqI3iulvcL6XGaYQRfiOd_LFfXu0_3hkjE8T8frvawkZk1UrQKbo70QxAbrZFoiLCDPccwjMETVkgaHGbOIffCm-CUUihgesh2RDezPPbqZCiPy1EK5I03wucYUUqmDQNYeTvFekaYoAeKgqTwjvW7hQLRxkpp_mEzOfWIBPldrr89zB-90s0jlaQcccXxin6bDAku8tW#c7368861261016363280

Go there! Now!!

~JD

Learning about Justine Part 5: The Tattoo

So, I decided to skip the next few pets and move on to more things about me. Cuz, you know you want to know more about me, right? RIGHT? Yeah, that's what I thought. :D And, after yesterday, we need something more uplifting and inspirational. ;-)

Do I have a tattoo?
Why yes, yes I do.

How many?
Just one. But I want more. I think they are addictive. Just like chocolate. And hair dye.

Where is it?
On my right right wrist. Here's a pic from right after it was done, and then one of a few days later.
How long have you had it?
About a year and a half.

What's the story behind it?
Hmmm.....first let me decide how personal I want to be with my followers. I love you all and everything, but some things are best left unsaid, you know? So let's just say I had an epiphany about something and I had to get it. How's that? It makes sense, right?

So, me and my sister go to the tattoo place. I already knew what I wanted, I'd had the vision in my head for awhile. I picked the font, the color (black) and did it on the computer. Printed it out, took it to the shop and got it done. Woo hoo!

I'm sitting in the chair, the tattoo lady does the copy machine thing that she puts on my wrist, facing the wrong way. Here's how the conversation went after that:

Me: "Um, I don't want it like that. Turn it around."

She flips it around, so the words are facing me. "Like this?"

"Yup."

She eyes me like I'm crazy. "You know that's upside-down, right?"

What? Internal thought here. "What do you mean 'upside-down'?"

She looks at me like I'm stupid. "When people get tattoos on their arms, wrists, etc - they face "out" so when you lower you arm to show someone, they can read/see it."

"Oh."

Again, the tattoo lady with the crazy eyes just stares at me. "I'm required to tell you that so you don't say you want a refund because I put it on upside-down and you didn't realize it."

At this point, I want to get up and walk out. Really, does she think I'm stupid? Wait...are there people out there that are really that stupid? Yikes! That's scary.

So I say, "No, that's the way I want it. I don't care if other people can read it or even see it for that matter. I want to be able to look at it everyday, anytime I want and remember these three things."

She gapes at me. "Oh."

"Yeah,...now let's get on with it."

So, the tattoo makes me remember that there are three gifts God gave us: Faith, Hope, and Love.

All righty...there's another little snippet about me. Hope you enjoyed. ;-)

~JD

Tuesday, April 13, 2010

Failure Anyone?

Today's regularly scheduled post "Pitching" has been rescheduled for a very important announcement:


There was an aspiring author named Justine Dell. For those of you who don't know, she loves to write more than she likes to breath. Writing is a freedom she embraces and sets sail with every second she can. It's a passion that's stronger than any bond she's ever known. There are days she loves it. There are days she hates it. Today is the latter.

Today she just feels like a failure.
In life.
In writing.
In just about everything.
And like this picture below, there is no excuse.

And maybe, that's what bothers her most. Not only does she not have an excuse for her failure. She also has no explanations for her rejections. That's bothersome. She's not talking about query rejections. She's talking about full ms rejections. The novels we pour our hearts out over, send out to an agent and then get a crappy form letter. It's frustrating. It's maddening. It's *$%(@!&!. Yeah, that's how she feels right now.

You probably guessed it. She got the rejection from her full ms that had been at the publisher for 37 days. Not only that, it seems the book she has been tirelessly working on to rewrite needs more work. She can't get it right. She can't seem to get anything right recently and it's starting to wear on her.

She doesn't want to feel like this. She wants to know why she has been rejected. A form letter just ain't enough for her. She wants to know why she can't seem to get the story right. She wants to know why she struggles with some of the most simplest things. There could be one simple answer: she's not cut out for the world of writing. It's crossed her mind. More than a time or two.

She doesn't cry very often, you know. A lot of people would say she has a heart of stone. But she doesn't. It's a facade. And a pretty good one at that. She's sensitive. She's caring. She wants to be liked. Respected. Accepted. And more importantly, she wants to be legit. She wants her name on the cover of book. Not to make money, not to have fame, but because she's a got a damn good story to tell.

I try to tell her that. She only listens a little more than 1/2 the time. So I'm telling you, in case you ever get like her. Depressed. Feeling alone. Not capable. Worthless. Read these:

Do you have a rejection contingency plan?

Jaded Dave

The bookmark

Since the links aren't working, here are the website for the abovementioned things:
http://www.forums.nathanbransford.com/viewtopic.php?f=5&t=548
http://www.davemalone.wordpress.com/2010/02/06/because-i-love-to/
http://www.justine-dell.blogspot.com/2010/02/bookmark.html

Read them, they make her feel better when she does. And then, she always has her beta. The marvelous woman who has pushed her to brink of her sanity with edits, yet has turned her story into something she never imagined: a powerful romance. It wouldn't have been without the beta. Justine knows that. She just likes to gripe every once and awhile about how hard the stuff is. I can't blame her. It is hard. Hell, it makes me crazy just watching her run around like a chicken with it's head cut off. The beta told her this, and made her cry:

"But we can keep trying. It will never be easy. We'll get 100 times more rejections than acceptances. Maybe it will be worse than that. So. Do you still want to keep going? I think that's a decision you get to make every day. Sometimes the answer, like tonight, is "no, not really." And sometimes it's "hell yes!" Tomorrow will be different. You'll remember how writing frees you, and all the friends and connections you've made--people in exactly the same boat as you. Or maybe you'll take a few days off. Or a few months at some point. It's only worth it if it's...worth it. And only you can decide if it's worth it to you. If you suffer this much with each rejection, someday the answer may be that it isn't. If you can find other reasons to keep going, writing may sustain you forever and keep your dreams alive and your mind sharp and your talent growing!"

She's love her beta. There aren't even words to describe that relationship. There never will be.

So, I will leave you tonight pondering your own journey in the madness I like to call the publishing world. Justine likes to call the black hole of death. I'm sure she'll change her mind if her story ever gets published. In the meantime, I'll try to remind her why she writes. What she strives for. And even though writing makes her feel free, there is other hard work that comes with it. Sometimes people just need a reminder.

Sorry this post is so long. I'm wordy. I think Justine gets that from me.

~Justine's Conscience.

Monday, April 12, 2010

Grammar Police! All right vs. Alright






So which sentence looks right to you?



1. All right, I'll stop by the store and get some milk on the way home.

2. Alright, I'll stop by the store and get some mild on the way home.

If you're like me, #2 looks right. And frankly, #1 does too. But which one is right as a writer???

Drum roll please...........


Number One takes the cake!!! YAY!! Confetti! Balloons drop from the ceiling!!

Whoa...stop. What? Number One?

Yeah, "all right" is the correct way to write it. I'm sure you've seen "alright" written plenty of times before and I'm sure you write it yourself at times. But, and trust me on this, "all right" is correct. Google it. Check it out on Bransforums. I can't really explain it. Just listen this time, please?


Okay, I'll try to give a quick run-down. It's my readers digest version. Alright gained acceptance somewhere in the past, but now us writers are told to use "all right". Don't ask me why, I don't have the answer to everything, after all.

I LOVE this rule. You want to know why? Well, you know I'm going to tell you anyway. Okay, so I'm mentioned my beta like a gazillion times (because that's how much I love her). Well, she is the know-it-all of all grammar know-it-alls (trust me, this is a good thing). I'm thinking about renting her out. I'm just trying to figure out how to do it so she doesn't realize it. I could make a killing. Totally kidding. Maybe *smiles*

Anyways...this was the ONE RULE SHE DIDN'T KNOW!!! Can't you believe it? After all she taught me, I actually taught her something. I felt so special that day. But, I understand why she didn't know - this one is still kind of iffy.

So, read it, learn it, write it, live it. That's what this deputy says!

And, I have special award - soley for my beta: Sarah. This one's for you girl:

Cheers~

~JD

Friday, April 9, 2010

Whoop! Whoop! Friday Update!!



Yes, it's that time again.
F R I D A Y
*BIG SMILE*

Why am I so happy, you ask? Because this week has literally been the s***. And I don't mean that in a good way. Good things happened this week, yes, but man - overall, the week pretty much sucked. It's better now, though, so lets get right down to it:

1. I LOVE guest bloggers! I've decided to make this a semi-regular thing. On guest blogger day I had a total of 283 hits to my blog!! AWESOME!!!!!!!! I've got this cool now statcounter function (from http://www.statcounter.com/) and it's way cool.

2. I'm up to 56 followers!! WELCOME! I owe over 20 of them to the guest blog spot. So, for all of you who are new...THANK YOU!!! If I haven't done the favor of return following, drop me a note and I will.

3. The publisher has had my full ms for exactly 34 days....and counting. I'm glad I made it past the 30 day mark because the guidelines say that they reject most stuff within the first 30 days. Maybe there's hope afterall?

4. BTTB, the novel currently in rewrite mode is FINISHED!!! With the rewrite anyway. Time for my beta to crack the whip and make sure my grammar is okay. ;-) That, and to make sure I didn't make a total mess out of the rewrite. Over 12K has been added after like 4K was dropped. The story is now 91K and in pretty good shape, I think. I'll let you know if my beta gives it the go or if I have to suffer through yet another rewrite. Ewh...I don't even like thinking about that.

5. AAG, my current wip, has been frozen in time this past week. Boo....

6. My daughters book, Lost & Found, made progress. During one of my more s***** days, I decided my brain needed a break, so I wrote another chapter. Added like 2,000 more words.

7. My beta reader, Sarah, got a request for partial!! It's her very first, so she's really excited. I'm excited for her, too. Her story is totally awesome!! CONGRATS SARAH!!!!!! ;-) If you didn't live 5 states away, I would hug you!

AND...HERE ARE THE ANSWERS TO YESTERDAY LIES & TRUTHS!!

1. I've never been outside of my home state: Indiana. Not even for a vacation.
This was true...until I was 16. That's when I took my first vacation. I've traveled more since then.

2. When I was growing up, I wanted to attend the University of Hawaii to become a Marine Biologist.
TRUE!! TRUE!!! Long story why it didn't happen and I ended up a business major. But this is TRUE!

3. I've had the same car since I was 16. A 1988 Chevy Beretta.
These cars are AWESOME!!! And, a 1988 Chevy Beretta was my first car, but I don't have it anymore. It was involved in a minor...err, okay...major fender bender in a state park with a row of trees.

4. My OCD is so out of control, I'm afraid to wear open-toed shoes (flip-flops, sandals, etc.) because I don't want my feet to get dirty.
Seriously, I'm not that OCD. If I ever get that way...someone please shoot me.

5. Even though I love to write, I hate to read.
This was true once, too. But I love to read now.

6. I've never been told I'm beautiful, pretty, or even cute. Mom, dad, and basic family members aside.
TRUE!! TRUE!! It's not that I think I'm any of these things, but hey - I'm a girl. What girl doesn't want to be told she's pretty? Okay, Christi from A Torch in the Tempest informed me that she once said I was cute, so I guess I lied. But sometimes you need to hear if from the opposite sex. Right? *blushes*

7. I have 10 pets: 2 horses, 3 dogs, 1 cat, 2 birds, 1 bunny, and a little mouse named Meeco.
Yikes! Even I'm not that crazy!! 2 Horse, 3 dogs, and 1 cat. That's my limit. I was surprised at how many people thought I had a funny farm at home. ;-)

8. I've never dyed, permed, or done anything weird to my hair. I'm all natural.
Psh...I'm a girl. Yeah, right.

So, who got one right and gets guest blog spot? There's more than one - Drum roll..........

Matthew Rush
Maybe Genius
Candice Williams
Ian (he doesn't have blog...so no link here)

So, if you got a guest blog spot and would actually like to use it, drop me an email (my profile page has an email link) and we'll set it up. Thanks for trying to find my truths everyone!!!

Have wonderful weekend!

~JD

Thursday, April 8, 2010

Creative Liar..I mean..Writer Award



Zoe Courtman has graced me with this award. Thank you...thank you. Check out her blog. So, here it is: The Creative Liar, err - Creative Writer award ;-)

So here's the scoop with this one peeps. I'm going to give you six lies and two truths. Or was it six truths and two lies? Heck, I don't remember now. I'm such a goob. All right, I'm going to do six lies and two truths. See if you can pick out the two truths about me. I'll post the answers TOMORROW during the Friday update!

And for anyone who gets at least one right...you can have guest blog spot!!! (Only if you want one, of course. I won't force you.)

It will be tough - these are hard. ;-) Here goes:

1. I've never been outside of my home state: Indiana. Not even for a vacation.

2. When I was growing up, I wanted to attend the University of Hawaii to become a Marine Biologist.

3. I've had the same car since I was 16: A 1988 Chevy Beretta.

4. My OCD is so out of control, I'm afraid to wear open-toed shoes (flip-flops, sandals, etc.) because I don't want my feet to get dirty.

5. Even though I love to write, I hate to read.

6. I've never been told I'm beautiful, pretty, or even cute. Mom, dad, and basic family members aside.

7. I have 10 pets: 2 horses, 3 dogs, 1 cat, 2 birds, 1 bunny, and a little mouse named Meeco.

8. I've never dyed, permed, or done anything weird to my hair. I'm all natural.

Hmmm....those are tough ones ;-) Good luck!

I hereby tag each and every one of my followers to claim this award for yourself and post it on your blog.



~JD

Tuesday, April 6, 2010

GENDER & PUBLISHING Stats & Facts



Welcome to guest blogger day!!! Matthew Rush from TQQQ Blog put together a wonderful post regarding gender and publishing. Without further ado...take it away!



It was easy to come up with a topic for Justine when she did a guest post for my blog last Friday. My blog is all about queries and the submission process so it was pretty obvious what she should do. Her blog is a little more personal and more about writing in general so at first I couldn't think of a topic.

Justine is a woman who writes (so far) romance novels. I'm a man who has (so far) written one YA novel. It would seem that we don't have much in common and maybe we don't but I think as writers we do share at least one thing: the need to create and tell stories.

It was while thinking about this lack of commonality that I noticed something in the blogoshpere I've so recently become a member of. It seems that it is vastly dominated by women. Here is some extremely unscientific data that supports this claim:

Followers of The QQQE (my blog):
7 Men
48 Women
3 Unknown

Followers of Justine Dell (this blog):
3 men
34 Women
1 Unknown

Obviously this doesn't prove a damn thing but it does seem to suggest that either more women are trying their hand at writing than men these days or at least more women are blogging about it.

So this comes down to one thing: What do I think about it?

I think it's awesome.

I have two daughters (well one eight year old daughter and one 14 year old person/thing/teenager) and I have always tried to instill in them the idea that they can do ANYTHING they want. I don't necessarily think that they have to become writers or artists or anything but I think it's wonderful that they're living in an age when it seems like they have that choice if they want to.

I know my elder daughter loves to read and even writes some pretty long fanfiction of her own. I think it's great that she can look at women like JK Rowling, Tamora Pierce and Cornelia Funke and tell herself: I can do that when I grow up if I want to. I'm not positive but I'm pretty sure there weren't as many famously successful women authors when my sisters and I and I were growing up; at least not any that wrote books that children read.

This trend may apply only to novice writers but it seems to me that it is true in publishing as well. I only checked for the two genres that Justine and I write in but here is some other interesting data from QueryTracker.net:

Agents representing romance:
33 of 182 total agents are men
That equals roughly 18% are men


Agents representing YA:
71 of 315 are men
That equals roughly 22.5% are men


NOTE: Gender ambiguous names such as Chris, Pat and Terry were counted as women to support my argument.

I'm not really sure what this might mean but I'm guessing that when Nelle Harper Lee wrote To Kill a Mockingbird men more than likely dominated the field of literary agents.

In fact she was one of only 3 women to win the Pulitzer Prize for Fiction in the decade of the 1960s. There were 12 women who won during the decade of 2000-2009 (this is a little misleading because they gave out 3 prizes per year that decade, rather than just one). I'd like to think that means that women are garnering recognition for things these days that might have been considered taboo, or even "above-them" just a few short decades ago. It was ridiculous of course, but a lot of people believed it.

According to the the NY times lists of #1 bestsellers at

http://www.hawes.com/no1_f_d.htm the year 1969 had only 3 #1 bestsellers, two of which were men:

Portnoy's Complaint by Philip Roth (Random House) - March 16, 1969
The Love Machine by Jacqueline Susann (Simon & Schuster) - June 22, 1969
The Godfather by Mario Puzo (Putnam) - September 21, 1969

Here is the list for 2009:

Black Ops by W.E.B. Griffin (Putnam) - January 18, 2009
Plum Spooky by Janet Evanovich (St. Martin's) - January 25, 2009
The Associate by John Grisham (Doubleday) - February 15, 2009
Promises In Death by J.D. Robb [A Nora Roberts pen name] (Putnam) - March 15, 2009
Handle With Care by Jodi Picoult (Atria) - March 22, 2009
True Detectives by Jonathan Kellerman (Ballantine) - April 12, 2009
Long Lost by Harlan Coben (Dutton) - April 19, 2009
Turn Coat by Jim Butcher (Roc) - April 26, 2009
Just Take My Heart by Mary Higgins Clark (Simon & Schuster) - May 3, 2009
First Family by David Baldacci (Grand Central) - May 10, 2009
The 8th Confession by James Patterson and Maxine Paetro (Little, Brown) - May 17, 2009
Dead and Gone by Charlaine Harris (Ace) - May 24, 2009
Wicked Prey by John Sandford (Putnam) - May 31, 2009
Gone Tomorrow by Lee Child (Delacorte) - June 7, 2009
The Scarecrow by Michael Connelly (Little, Brown) - June 14, 2009
Skin Trade by Laurell K. Hamilton (Berkley) - June 21, 2009
Relentless by Dean Koontz (Bantam) - June 28, 2009
Knockout by Catherine Coulter (Putnam) - July 5, 2009
Finger Lickin' Fifteen by Janet Evanovich (St. Martin's) - July 12, 2009
Swimsuit by James Patterson and Maxine Paetro (Little, Brown) - July 19, 2009
Black Hills by Nora Roberts (Putnam) - July 26, 2009
Best Friends Forever by Jennifer Weiner (Atria) - August 2, 2009
The Defector by Daniel Silva (Putnam) - August 9, 2009
The Girl Who Played With Fire by Stieg Larsson (Knopf) - August 16, 2009
Bad Moon Rising by Sherrilyn Kenyon (St. Martin's) - August 23, 2009
South of Broad by Pat Conroy (Nan A. Talese/Doubleday) - August 30, 2009
Alex Cross's Trial by James Patterson and Richard DiLallo (Little, Brown) - September 13, 2009
Dark Slayer by Christine Feehan (Berkley) - September 20, 2009
The Last Song by Nicholas Sparks (Grand Central) - September 27, 2009
The Lost Symbol by Dan Brown (Doubleday) - October 4, 2009
The Gathering Storm by Robert Jordan and Brandon Sanderson (Tor/Tom Doherty) - November 15, 2009
Ford County by John Grisham (Doubleday) - November 22, 2009
Under the Dome by Stephen King (Scribner) - November 29, 2009
I, Alex Cross by James Patterson (Little, Brown) - December 6, 2009
"U" Is For Undertow by Sue Grafton (Putnam) - December 20, 2009

Perhaps half of these authors are not women but they do equal more than a third.

I suppose referencing bestsellers is a bad example, especially since we all know some of these books are ... less than stellar but I think it does still show that women are finding more and more success as writers, editors, agents and journalists as the years go by and I hope that pattern continues.

This is all just a matter of opinion, of course, but I find it pretty exciting, especially considering my daughters and all the options they have for their future. Justine and I are both interested to hear what other people think, so please share your thoughts in the comments.



Thanks Matt! I think this information is amazing, and shows how things have changed over the years and no doubt will continue changing. Who knows, maybe in the next 50 years more writers will be people under the age of 25. Teenagers even.

Funny thing and random fact: the agent that requested my (romance) full ms was male.

Don't forget to stop by and follow Matt's blog. It's interesting and helpful to learn about his query process. Check it out.

~JD





Monday, April 5, 2010

Grammar Police! Never End A Sentence In a Preposition


You've probably guessed by now, I'm not an English major. There are times I'm certain my beta is at home laughing at all of my grammar mistakes. I entertain her - yay me ;-)

Let's be clear: My degree is in Business. I'm currently going through my MBA program. See? Not English - business. I feel bad that my beta has to correct all the common mistakes I know nothing about. I think she works too hard on my ms (but I appreciate it, they would suck without her). So, this weeks topic, and another problem I have: Ending a sentence in a preposition.

First, I had to figure out what a freaking preposition was. Please don't laugh at me. I googled it. Did you know there are over 150 prepositions in the English language? Yeah - like I'm gonna be able to keep all those straight.

The only one I will every remember is "at", because when I was in high school I would ask something like "Hey, mom - where's my book bag at?" She would always reply "Before the at." Which meant, end the sentence before I said at. So, "at". I've got that one. Now, the other 149 - not so much.

Personally, I don't see anything wrong with it. I speak that way, so I think I should be able to write that way. Alas, I will once again heed the advice of my intimidating *ahem* I mean, extremely smart and helpful beta. (You know I love you Sarah) and try to keep the prepositions from the end of my sentences. Otherwise, she may one day throw my MS back in my face and say, "How many times do I have to tell you?!?!?"

Without further ado, here's a short list of prepositions for your viewing pleasure. And yes, from time to time you will see them at the end of my sentences. ;-)

aboard about above across after against along amid among anti around as at before behind below beneath beside besides between beyond but by concerning considering despite down during except excepting excluding following for from in inside into like minus near of off on onto opposite outside over past per plus regarding round save since than through to toward towards under underneath unlike until up upon versus via with within without (and if this is wrong, blame it on google)

Whew...that's a lot.

And don't forget about the guest blogger tomorrow!! Matthew Rush from The Quintessentially Questionable Query Experiment will be joining us. Don't forget to stop by!

Cheers!

~JD

Friday, April 2, 2010

Whoop! Whoop! Friday Update!!


It's that time again. Friday Update!! LOTS has happened this week, so lets get started, shall we? ;-)

1. My book that's out for submission has been with the publisher for 27 days...and counting.

2. BBTB, the book that I mentioned the rewrite on last week, is moving right along. I've only got 40 pages left of the rewrite. There it is! The light at the end of the tunnel! Can you see it? Can you? But...hmmm..there's something blocking my path. What is it, you ask? It's a new scene. I've done something I never thought I'd do: I shot the hero. Eek! I'm stuck...totally stuck. I'm pretty good with happy emotions, desires, longings, anger, and such - after all, I do write romance. However, I don't do action (this is a first for me) and I don't do grief that well. I learned that I was lacking in this department pretty darn quick after I wrote the first few sentences. I deleted...then when back and rewrote. Rinse. Repeat. I've gotten a whole page done now - after TWO WHOLE DAYS. My muse needs to come back from vacation and help with this scene. I'm lost.

3. My current WIP actually managed to get some words added to it this past Saturday. 5,500 words. Whoa! I think it's funny because I only added 8K over my one week hiatus when I wasn't working, and I actually almost made better progress in one day than I did a whole week LoL. Now only if I could be that focused all the time ;-)

4. My daughter SHOCKED me when she asked, with her bright blue eyes and dimples, "Mommy, will you please try and get my book published?" Awwwh. My heart melted right then. I'm a sucker, so I said yes. Grrr....like I needed another log on my ever growing fire, but it's Emily - I would do anything for her. It will be challenging, umm...because I know nothing about childrens books/MG/early readers/or whatever you would call what I am writing for her. Not only that, most agents/publishers don't do romance/children's crossover thing. Its...ummm...well, if you read romance you would know why they like to keep them separate. Maybe I need another pen? I digress. I will try, for her.

5. I actually finished reading three books this week! I swear, I think there was another "me" hiding out in my pocket giving me all this extra "time" I'm always begging for. Hopefully the second me sticks around for awhile.

Next week: A guest blogger! It's my first, so I'm really excited! Matthew Rush, who blogs on The Quintessentially Questionable Query Experiment will be joining us. In the meantime, go check out his blog.

So, I think that's it for now. Have a wonderful weekend!!

~JD

Thursday, April 1, 2010

Daughter's Requested YA - WIP

So, today is April Fool's day. I've got no reason to play any tricks or anything, so I thought I would share the first six pages of my daughters requested book: Lost and Found. For those of you new to blog, my daughter is 11, totally in love with horses, and requested I write a story just for her. Here's the first chapter. It's the first draft, so please excuse any errors you may find. Additional Disclaimer: This is the my first attempt at writing anything "childlike", so forgive me if you read/write this stuff and you see all my terrible mistakes.



Kelly Moore flung open her eyes and was delighted to see the sun shining through her curtains. Morning! She pushed the covers off and jumped out of bed, ignoring the sting on her foot when she stepped on her boot spur. Her mother had always told her not to leave those things lying around.

She limped from her room, wanting to run, but hampered by prick in her heel. Kelly stopped in front of her mother’s room long enough to tap on the door before letting herself in.

“Mom!” she called. “It’s today mom, it’s today!”

Kelly’s mother, Jaime, was already dressed and fixing her hair in front of her dresser. “Yes, dear. I know.” She put down the hairbrush and smiled brightly. “You’re excited aren’t you?”

“Excited? Excited isn’t even the word! This is going to be the BEST day ever!” Kelly squealed happily as she spun around and limped back into her bedroom as fast as she could. Darn spurs. She guessed that would teach her a lesson next time.

Still rushing, she threw on some old clothes, pulled a hairbrush through her long brown hair and slid on the boots that had attacked her foot that morning. Not even bothering with breakfast, she flew down the stairs and out the front door towards the barn.

She ran all the way, three-hundred-twenty yards to be exact, and she was huffing for air by the time she slide open the barn door. The summer heat was full blast even though it was still early morning and the humidity already had sweat dripping from Kelly’s face. She wiped the droplets of sweat with the sleeve of her shirt and rushed over to her horses stall.

“Good morning Rocket.” Kelly cracked open the door just as Rocket turned around and whinnied at her. Rocket pushed her nose right into Kelly’s face and she started to giggled. She reached up and stroked the mare’s thick neck and nuzzled her face.

“No, no Rocket.” Kelly playfully pushed Rocket’s head away when she tried to nibble some of Kelly’s hair. “You’re hungry aren’t you girl?”

Within seconds, Kelly had her arms full of hay and a bucket in her hand full of oats and sweet feed. Rocket started to prance around her stall.

“Easy girl,” Kelly said softly as she threw the hay into the stall and poured the feed mixture into the food bucket. “We don’t want you getting hurt before we compete today.” Rocket plunged her head into the food and Kelly laughed as she scratched the horse’s soft nose. Kelly loved her horse more than anything.

Rocket was a solid black quarter horse with a coat so shiny you would almost need sunglasses to shield your eyes on a bright day. The mare was beautiful with a long, full, mane, one speckled black eye and one blue, which was very rare with her coloring. She was thick bodied and built for endurance and speed. That’s what Kelly used her for: speed.

Kelly was a barrel racer and Rocket was her contesting horse. Rocket could run polls, flags, and keyhole as well, but she shined when she ran the barrels. It was in her heart, in her blood, and Kelly had worked long and hard to become the perfect teammate for Rocket. Together they accomplished things that people twice Kelly’s age couldn’t. At the young of fourteen, Kelly was practically just starting, but the connection she shared with Rocket made them almost unbeatable. Together they had won two state championships the last two years and this year Kelly was determined to not only win state, but nationals too. That would mean her and Rocket would be the best barrel racing team in her age group.

“There’s my girl.” Kelly whipped her head around and found her father, Darrell, standing in the bright doorway, the sun giving him the strong silhouette of a cowboy.

“Morning Daddy. I just fed Rocket her breakfast and then I’ll go work her out a bit.”
Darrell walked towards Kelly, his spurs clanging with each step. “Breakfast, uh? Mom says you ran out this morning without yours. Don’t you think you should eat too?”

Kelly wrinkled her face. “Awh, Dad. I’m not hungry right now. Rocket needs me.”

“Rocket needs to finish her breakfast, just as you need to go have yours.” Kelly frowned as her dad pushed her towards the house. “Scoot, mom’s fixing your favorite.”

Kelly’s eyes shot up. “Blueberry pancakes?”

“Yup, now run in, you can work with Rocket when you are done.”

Kelly ran into the house, sweat once again dripping from the heat. She plopped down at the table, thankful for the cool air in the kitchen. As fast as she could, she gulped down her orange juice and stuffed her stomach full of her mom’s delicious blueberry pancakes. They had more than just blueberries in them, they had raspberries too. Her mom said it was a ‘secret ingredient’, but Kelly figured out the secret along time ago. But they still were the best pancakes around. Too bad she ate this so fast she didn’t even have time to taste them.

“Thanks mom!”

Kelly ran out back outside to the barn and found the Rocket had finished her breakfast as well. And she had made quite the mess in her stall. Grumbling, Kelly walked over to the muck bucket and grabbed the pitch fork. She loved her horse, but man, she hated cleaning up those big piles of poop. She always did it though; she knew it was part of the responsibility of owning a horse. Plus, if she didn’t, her parents wouldn’t let her ride and that would be like the end of the world to Kelly.

With the stall clean as a whistle and her boots covered with sawdust, Kelly made her way to tack room and pulled down everything she would need to warm up Rocket. She placed the items on the rack right outside the stall. Rocket was getting excited again, neighing and blowing puffs of air out her nose. Rocket knew what they were getting ready to do. Rocket loved it. That’s another reason they made such a good team. Kelly knew her horse had to have the heart to run and race, otherwise she would never be good enough. She had to find that perfect combination of enthusiasm and speed. Skill helps too, but Kelly knew that could be taught. After all, her father was a rancher who grew up around horses and he knew a thing or two about training. It also helped that her mother had been a national barrel racer. Kelly guessed the sport was in her blood too, just like Rockets. Rockets mom was famous barrel racer; she still held the world record for the fastest time.

Kelly went into the stall and put on Rockets halter, attached the lead rope and maneuvered her way into the aisle way.

“That’s a good girl,” Kelly spoke softly to Rocket as she rubbed her hand over the mare’s cantle and ears. She hooked Rocket to the crossties and proceeded to tack her up. “We’ve got a big day a head of us, girl. I need to you focus and most importantly – have fun!”

“Kelly!”

At the sound of her dad’s voice, Kelly peeked under Rockets neck. “Over here dad!” She straightened up and gave on last tug on the girth, to make sure it was nice and tight. Last thing she wanted to do was have her saddle fall off when she was going around the barrels.

“Bout’ ready?” Darrell asked.

“Yup, just give me two more seconds and we’ll be good to go.” Kelly slipped of the halter and put the bridle on Rocket. “All set!” She led the mare to the outdoor arena, the morning sun heating up even more. “Man dad, it’s really bad out today.”

“Sure is. Let’s not work Rocket too hard, we don’t want her coming up sick before we leave.”

“Yeah, that would stink.” Kelly turned to face Rocket, propped her left foot in the stirrup and threw herself up into the saddle. She spent a few seconds readjusting and then shot of towards the barrels.

“Easy!” Her father called out.

She couldn’t help it, though. Once she got up on Rockets back, she went into the ‘zone.’ That special place she shared with Rocket when they moved as one. It was magical. Kelly eased back on the speed, knowing if she pushed hard Rocket would dehydrate from the heat.

They ran warm-up laps first, just trotting the clover pattern around the barrels. Then Kelly decided to run a few practice runs. She positioned herself at the end of the arena and lopped her horse in a few tights circles. Then she spread out and shot towards the first barrel, full speed, hair blowing in the wind.

“Ay-ya!” She yelled as she turned the first tight corner around the barrel and shot off toward the second. She rocked in her saddle, easily able to keep her balance. Smooth as silk, the turn on the second barrel was flawless. A firm kick to the mare’s side and she went full speed to the final barrel.

“Ay-ya!” Kelly yelled again. Rocket spun tightly around the barrel and straightened up, ready to go towards the finish line.

Kelly loosened her grip on the reins, raised up in her saddle a bit and yelled hee-ya! Rocket picked up a gallop and sprinted to the finished line. Once there, Kelly leaned back, dug her heels into her stirrups and said “Whoooa.” Rocket locked up her hind quarters and came to a dead halt in less than a second.

Wind blown and breathing excitedly, Kelly reached down and padded Rocket on the neck.

“Good girl.” Kelly rubbed her hands across Rocket’s sweat slicked hair. “I think that’s the best run we’ve ever done, girl.”

“She’s in top shape today.” Kelly looked up and saw her father walk towards them. “I timed ya’. That was the fastest run you’ve ever had. 14.45 seconds.”

Kelly flew off Rockets back and jumped for joy towards her father. “Really?” She squealed. “That’s awesome!” She patted the mare’s thick neck again. “Rocket, no one is going to be able to beat us this year. I promise.”
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